Prayer's Answer
This was once titled “Untitled,” but after analyzing a comment, I realized it needed clarification. Though it may seem a bit ambiguous, there is a story. Maybe to share. Maybe to keep.
Scared . . . that wouldn’t even begin
A type of nervousness that controls
Dictating trembling confusion
A wave of panic, a surge of trepidation
I have never encountered such
Nor do I wish to endure
Stop . . . oh, how I wish it would
Enter Calm, in any form
But, alas, Chaos remains
I fight, I struggle, and I lose
How can I conquer this war
In my head and my heart
Silence . . . here at last
Only for a moment
Long enough to hear words
Simple, powerful words that echo
Echo peacefully in my soul
“Trust me . . . Trust me”
Scared . . . that wouldn’t even begin
A type of nervousness that controls
Dictating trembling confusion
A wave of panic, a surge of trepidation
I have never encountered such
Nor do I wish to endure
Stop . . . oh, how I wish it would
Enter Calm, in any form
But, alas, Chaos remains
I fight, I struggle, and I lose
How can I conquer this war
In my head and my heart
Silence . . . here at last
Only for a moment
Long enough to hear words
Simple, powerful words that echo
Echo peacefully in my soul
“Trust me . . . Trust me”
posted by Kaymbree Grey at 11:29 PM
2 Comments:
I would like to see a title besides "Untitled" on this one just because it is somewhat ambigous on its message. Are you afraid of love or the person who is trying to love you?
The love the way that you start each stanza with an S. Scared, Stop, Silence are vert strong words to start each stanza giving a feeling of worry or conservity to the poem. The six lines in each poem also gives it an organized image which helps with the theme of worrying or thinking about this "war" between the mind and heart.
The Poem is much stronger now that we have something to go off of in terms of the story behind it. I can feel a lot more the poem because I can relate back to my experinces with prayer and compare them to yours in this poem.
What once was something that could of been a lover's dual now becomes something more personal to the reader, a discussion with god.
Very nice.
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